Need Grammar check for my website

[tsagoii]

Hi all,

Thanks again for the help provided so far for my online resume that im
working on.

The section that remains no be checked are my porfolio content.

Since im a French Native, my grammar in english may not be as strong as my
french. I would appreciate if someone with good english grammar background
could go over that section and tell me if there is obvious spelling errors
or grammar errors.

here is the link to the portfolio section. to view the content you need to
click on one of the client link within the portfolio page.

http://www.wide-awake.net/resume/php/folio.php

Thank you and special thank to Matt and Erika to have helped me with the
other section of my site.

sincerely tsagoii

 

[Toby A Inkster]

http://www.wide-awake.net/resume/php/folio.php

"Here are some project" should be "Here are some projects".

"more detailed info" should be "more detailed information" ("info" is too
casual) or better "more information"

On xp.php:
"The need to learn PHP and MySQL came to me this year" sounds a bit
clumsy. Better would be "This year I felt a need to learn PHP and MySQL".

"The possibility are endless" should be "The possibilities are endless"
(plural).

 

[nice.guy.nige]

Hi all, [...]
Since im a French Native, my grammar in english may not be as strong
as my french. I would appreciate if someone with good english grammar
background could go over that section and tell me if there is obvious
spelling errors or grammar errors.

Again, on xp.php, I would suggest the following changes.

"At the beginning of my career I was commissioned for basic work like
corporate logo design, stationary, illustration and page layout. Over years
of experience, I have had the chance to embark on more interesting projects;
press kit, covers, packaging, posters and color separation."

to

"At the beginning of my career I was commissioned for basic work, such as
corporate logo design, stationary, illustration and page layout. After years
of experience, I have had the chance to embark on more interesting projects;
press kits, covers, packaging, posters and color separation."

"For the past 3 years, all my work has been related to internet."

to

"For the past 3 years, all my work has been related to the internet."

or "For the past 3 years, I have concentrated on designing for the
internet."

"knowing HTML gave me even more control over my designs and how to integrate
then into web format."

to

"knowing HTML gave me even more control over my designs and how to integrate
then into a web format."

Hope that helps,
Nige

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[SteW]

Hi all,

Thanks again for the help provided so far for my online resume that im
working on.

The section that remains no be checked are my porfolio content.

Since im a French Native, my grammar in english may not be as strong as my
french. I would appreciate if someone with good english grammar background
could go over that section and tell me if there is obvious spelling errors
or grammar errors.

here is the link to the portfolio section. to view the content you need to
click on one of the client link within the portfolio page.

http://www.wide-awake.net/resume/php/folio.php

Thank you and special thank to Matt and Erika to have helped me with the
other section of my site.

sincerely tsagoii

Homepage:
paragraph 3, sentence 1: missing full stop (period)

"Please note that at any time reference can be provided upon request".
- either "a reference can be provided", or preferably "references can be
provided"

Rearranging to "Please note that references can be provided upon request
at any time" sounds more natural to me.

1994 to 1996
"Formation was based on creativity and design". Not quite sure what you
mean here, perhaps "The syllabus was centred [centered - US] around
creativity and design"

"Learning the new technologies used in the media and publicity industry,
without leaving behing old methods of creations"

"behing" should be "behind"

try: "It taught the new technologies used in the media and publicity
industry, without ignoring traditional methods".



"Covering the multiple possibility of projects. From corporate logo
creations, annual repport, book cover, packaging to promotional materials"

perhaps: "The course covered many aspects of art and design including
corporate logo creations, annual reports, book covers, packaging and
promotional materials."
n.b. "repport" should be "report"

Ste W

 

[Toby A Inkster]

"knowing HTML gave me even more control over my designs and how to integrate
then into web format."

to

"knowing HTML gave me even more control over my designs and how to integrate
then into a web format."

Me thinks those are identical.

them?

 

[SteW]

nice.guy.nige wrote:




Me thinks those are identical.

them?

No, you missed a

Ste W

 

[SteW]

Correction to my previous reply:

nice.guy.nige wrote:




Me thinks those are identical.

No, you missed a

them?

agreed

Ste W

 

[Mark Parnell]

corporate logo design, stationary, illustration and page layout. After

years
^^^^^^^^^^

That should be stationery (unless it's not going anywhere)

 

[tsagoii]

thank you for those observation, i shall go over them and make the
appropriate adjustment.

This is really appreciated,

Tsagoii

 

[nice.guy.nige]

Me thinks those are identical.

Subtle inclusion of the word 'a'.

them?

Well spotted! OT, though of course, as the OP wanted grammar checking, not
spelling! ;-)

Cheers,
Nige

--
Nigel Moss.

Email address is not valid. (e-mail address removed). Take the dog out!
http://www.nigenet.org.uk | Boycott E$$O!! http://www.stopesso.com
"How strange the change from major to minor..."